四级作文得分点及分值【一】
春天， 万物复苏，小河水哗哗地顺流而下； 活泼机灵的小鸟们在枝头喳喳地纵情歌唱； 小草们神不知鬼不觉地从地下探出了脑袋，大地换上了绿色的新衣； 小野花们争先恐后地展示着自己的美丽； 一棵棵大树好像正在返老还童， 抽出嫩黄色的新芽；。年迈的`凤凰木也紧跟着春天的步伐， 吐出米粒大小的嫩叶， 就像刚出生的婴儿那般娇嫩。
夏天，太阳像一个火炉似地炙烤着地面。凤凰木的叶子早已变成了深绿色，枝条也向四周扩展了许多，变成了一把绿色的大伞。当太阳透过茂密的树叶筛下一束束金光时， 美丽的凤凰花绽开了一张张笑脸，好像给凤凰木披上了红色的霞衣。
秋天，凤凰树的叶子慢慢地变成了金黄色，在微风吹拂下纷纷飘落下来， 给地面铺上了一层厚厚的金色地毯。课间十分钟，我和小伙伴们在凤凰树下尽情地玩耍、嬉闹，甭提有多高兴了。
冬天，刺骨的寒风从耳边呼呼地刮过，古老的凤凰木褪去了繁华，仿佛一个弯着腰、知识渊博的老学者，正在讲述着她一百多年来的沧桑岁月， 并勉励我们克服各种困难、勤奋学习，成为对国家有贡献的人才。
这就是我们百年老校的百年古树---凤凰木。
四级作文得分点及分值【二】
Dear my father and mother,
This letter is my inner feelings. I want to thank both of you for so many years’ care and help.
During my growth, you have made a lot of efforts and love for me. When I make a success, both of you are more excited than me, and support me to do better. Even though I have failed, you always share sorrow with me and encourage me not to give up. Especially, during my preparation for CET-4, the support from you is always everywhere. I have passed the exam successfully.
You love is so unselfish that I am deeply affected, so I will study hard to be a useful person and won’t make you disappointed. Anyway, I would like to express the deep gratitude to you.
With best wishes.
Sincerely yours,
Li Ming
四级作文得分点及分值【三】
Nowadays, many famous university campuses have become one of the popular tourist attractions. It has been shown on TV and on the radio that every year thousands and thousands of middle school students visit Tsing Hua University and Peking University and other famous universities in China. In the place far away from the capital city, the local students also visit the universities famous in their own province.
So far as the present situation is concerned, is it a good or bad thing to open the university campus for tourists? Different people have different opinions. On one hand, some people argued that it is a good thing for the students to visit the famous university campus in that it can enable the middle students to get more information about the university and they can have enough time and opportunity to prepare themselves with the chance to get into the university. On the other hand, some people hold a negative view about this phenomenon. In their opinion, the public tourism will have negative effect on the universities because it will not only do harm to the environment but also to the intellectual atmosphere.
In my opinion, the tourism to the universities is not a good thing. The campus is mainly a place for study. With the increasing tourism on the campus, it will ruin the spiritual atmosphere in this learning field.
首先，提纯范文 “谋篇布局”及结构模板。
第一段：提出问题或现象。Nowadays, … … have become one of the popular … …. It has been shown on TV and on the radio that … ….
第二段：正反列举人们的看法。So far as the present situation is concerned, is it a good or bad thing to … …? Different people have different opinions. On one hand, some people argued that it is a good thing for … … in that … …. On the other hand, some people hold a negative view about this phenomenon. In their opinion, … … will have negative effect on … … because it will not only do harm to … … but also to … ….
第三段：摆明自己观点。In my opinion, … … is not a good thing. … … With the increasing … …, it will ruin … ….
其次，提纯范文“段落写作”。
段落写作分为统一性，连贯性和完整性三方面。
统一性(unity：段落开头的主题句应该做到不可太宽泛，也不可太具体，做到有较强的概括性才能使下文做到有的放矢的展开。范文第二段首句以设问的方式提出一个问题is it a good or bad thing就有很强的概况性。下文自然会一方面从好的方面说明，另一方面从坏的方面说明。
连贯性(coherence：关联词是使文章段落之间相互连贯的必要条件。范文中nowadays, on one hand, on the other hand, in one’s opinion即以“启承转合”递进的顺序是文章条理清晰，层层展开。
完整性(completeness：以设问句“So far as the present situation is concerned, is it a good or bad thing to open the university campus for tourists?”开头，这是平时较少运用的段落写作方式——设问法。“On one hand … …. On the other hand, … ….”是段落写作分类列举法的典型用法。
再次，提纯范文“句子写作”。
1. It has been shown that … …
类似句型：It is known to us that … …
It is said that … …
It is reported that … …
It is controversial that … …
2. “… … Tsing Hua University and Peking University and other famous universities … …。”——并列句。并列句是简单的复杂句。但其运用方法并不简单，注意练习并接句的使用，会使句子显的更加饱满。
3. enable v. 使…能够
I gave him full directions to enable him to find the house.
4. in that = because
表“因为”的连词还有since, for, as，如：
The boy was absent because he was ill. = The boy was absent since he was ill.
此句以我们常用的人称开头，句式简单，我们可以通过把since提前改变句式，如：
Since the boy was ill, he was absent. 句式多样化。
最后，提纯范文“措辞”。
1. attraction n. 具有吸引力的事情。
2. thousands and thousands 成千上万的
形容“多”的表达方法：millions and millions
a multitude of
a great deal of
a large amount of
plenty of
many a
3. “some people argued that … …”中的“argue”并不是“讨论，辩论”的意思，而是“认为”。
I argue that … …
I maintain that … …
I claim that … …
I insist that … … = I think that … …
I hold that … …
I assert that … …
I assume that … …
4. negative adj. 否定的.，相反的
hold negative view = hold opposite opinions
5. phenomenon n. 现象
social phenomenon 社会现象
natural phenomenon 自然现象
6. intellectual adj. 聪明的= intelligent, bright, clever
(选词策略：使用最近所学的单词，如intellectual > intelligent > bright > clever
在分析并掌握范文之后，我们需要运用范文知识练习仿写。笔者运用2005年12月范文中的模板结构仿写了2006年12月的四级作文，以供参考：
1. 许多人喜欢在除夕夜看春节晚会
2. 但有些人提出取消春节晚会
3. 我的看法
Nowadays, the Spring Festival Evening has become one of the popular topic and attractions during every traditional New Year’s Eve. It has been shown on TV and on the radio that every year thousands and thousands of Chinese people appear to be accustomed to enjoying the sights and sounds of a brilliant feast, while gathering with their beloved family.
However, an increasing number of people have voiced different opinions towards it. So far as the present situation is concerned, is it a good or bad thing to cancel the Spring Festival Evening? Different people have different opinions. On one hand, some people argued that it is a good thing to amuse the audience in that it is composed by a numerous adequate programs, such as the emotional song, the graceful dance, the funny short sketch, the amusing comic dialogue, the delightful magic, and the marvelous acrobatics and so on. On the other hand, some people hold a negative view about this phenomenon. In their opinion, the Spring Festival Evening will have negative effect on the family harmony because it will not only do harm to having the talks between family members on the Spring Festival Eve but also to enjoying the gourmet meal in a fancy restaurant.
In my opinion, the Spring Festival Evening is a good thing. It may not remain a must for all people, but it can bring us a strong sense of festivity and serve as an alternative among the variety of holiday activities. With the increasing audience of the Spring Festival Evening, it will ruin a distinctive culture during the Spring Festival vacation.
四级作文得分点及分值【四】
In the cartoon we can see a large person being measured by a tailor to get suitable clothes made. Anything to be done must be measured in advance so that we are able to find a proper way to do it. If the tailor does not take measurements of the man, then he would not be able to make suitable clothes for this person.
This same principle applies to solving any other problem. Firstly, when we want to know the reality of something, we must describe it like it is, getting rid of our prejudices and exaggerations, so that we can have an unbiased view. Secondly, the object should be analyzed in a concrete way so that we can grasp the reasons and rules of it. Thirdly, we must adapt our approach to solving a problem, for each situation is different from the others. So we must view a problem from different perspectives.
The cartoon implies different meanings to different people. A teacher should adopt different teaching methods according to the students in the class; a doctor should prescribe different treatments according to the patient's symptoms; a farmer should seed different plants according to the various conditions of the earth. From a philosophical point of view, dissimilarproblems should be approached differently. Good results come from attentive analysis of a problem.
英语漫画作文写作指导
第一、读图审题
四级漫画作文中的漫画通常反映一个社会现象或生活哲理，要求考生根据自己对漫画的理解来写作。因此，要写好四级漫画作文，审题格外重要。考生在下笔之前要仔细看漫画，弄清漫画的寓意，这是文章切题的保证。此外，在本次四级考试的三道写作题中，Directions部分都给出了写作内容的大致方向，这也为考生把握漫画寓意提供了帮助。下面笔者就来逐一梳理2013年6月四级作文的三幅漫画及其传达的寓意。
第二、谋篇布局
在把握文章的主旨之后，考生就可以构思整篇文章的架构了。四级漫画作文的写作可以分为下面三个段落。
第一段：开门见山，简要描述一下漫画内容，并指出漫画的寓意。描述漫画内容是为了揭示其中的寓意，是手段而不是目的，所以描述要简洁明快，一般来说一句话足矣。需要提醒考生的是，写作的Directions部分虽然给出了大致的写作主题，但是也要求考生对漫画进行简要描述，因此考生切不可抛开漫画内容直接展开议论。
第二段：表达考生对漫画寓意的看法，这是文章的重心所在。比如，就第一道写作题目而言，考生应在第二段阐述阅读文学作品的重要性;就第二道写作题目而言，考生应在第二段论述为什么凡事必须从小事做起;就第三道写作题目而言，考生应在第二段论述掌握基本技能的重要性。
第三段：指出漫画的寓意对大学生的教育意义，或者提出解决问题的建议。考生需要注意的是，结尾段一般并不需要实质性的分析，其主要作用是总结和升华，使文章结构完整。所以结尾段的写作要简明扼要，点到即止。
第三、论证方法
漫画作文的第二段要表达考生对漫画寓意的看法，这是文章的核心段落，也是作文字数达到要求的关键。因此，考生在这一段要浓墨重彩，写深、写透。在写这一段时，考生要尽量摆事实、讲道理，避免空泛的议论。针对这一核心段落，笔者在此推荐以下三种展开议论的常用方法，希望对考生有所启发。
1.条分缕析
在写作第二段时，考生可以从2～3个方面对观点展开论述，这种写法可使文章显得层次清楚、条理清晰。例如，本次四级作文第一道题目的第二段需要阐述阅读文学作品的重要性，考生就可以从以下两个方面展开：第一，相对于电子媒体，文学阅读更能培养人的想象力;第二，阅读文学作品能够帮助我们更好地了解社会。请参考下面的\'范文。
There wasa time when children could relish (欣赏/ 也可以使用appreciate 替换 literature. But childrentoday can enjoy the sounds and action on a TV or computer screen. “So why bother reading?” some ask. The reasonis obvious： It enriches our imagination. When we read apiece of literature， we are living the life of RobinHood or starting an adventure with Tom Sawyer. In addition， literature is the mirror of society，whether it be poetry， drama or fiction. We know thesociety better through literature.
2.举例论证
如果漫画所传达的是抽象的人生哲理，那么考生在论述时最好能举出具体的事例，尽量避免空洞的说教。比如，就本次四级作文第二道题目而言，考生可以在第二段中举出一些成功人士如何从小事做起的例子。笔者下面提供的范文中用到的是哈兰·桑德斯上校从一个小吃店做起，最后缔造出遍布全球的肯德基快餐帝国的例子，用以证明只有从小事做起，才能成就大事。请看下面的范文。
Everything is smallbefore it is big. A good example is KFC. In 1930 Colonel Harland Sanders beganserving food to his service station customers in Corbin， a city in Kentucky. He fried chicken in his own kitchen andperfected his secret recipe there. From the small roadside eatery， he went on to build an empire of fast food.
3.类比论证
如果漫画中的寓意不容易通过具体的事例来证明，那么考生还可以使用类比论证的方法，即通过打比方来论证一个抽象的道理。比如，对于本次四级作文的第三道题目，考生可以在第二段中用学习打篮球的过程来打比方。学习打篮球时，只有先学会了投球、运球、传球这些基本技能，才能进一步学习高难度的技能。以此类推，无论做任何事情，只有掌握了基本的技能，才可能取得更大的成功。此外，考生还可以举出统计数字，用具体的研究结果来证明论点。请看下面的范文。
Simple as they mayseem， basic skills serve as the first link in the chain of success. Thisis analogous to learning to play basketball. If shooting， dribbling and passing are not mastered，learning advanced skills will become difficult， if notimpossible. A growing body of research has also documented that such basicskills as reading， writing and computing are highlycorrelated with success later in life. A 2012 study surveyed 300 CEOs ofFortune 500 companies and found that 87% attributed part of their success tothe basic skills they learned in primary school.
四级作文得分点及分值【五】
“来来来，快站好队!”袁老师带着夹记分册的板子走了过来，我的心扑通扑通地跳得厉害，袁老师是我们的体育老师，对运动相当不拿手的我来说，对于她自然没什么好感，她经常罚我干这个干那个，还经常教育我要多运动，今天不用说，该轮到女生800米期中考了，我紧张得手心直冒冷汗。
“稍息，立正，向右看齐，向前看，各排报数。”“一、二、三……”“人都到齐了吗?”“女生今天跑800米都知道吧，有没有人不舒服，要见习?”我虽然很想见习，但也鬼使神差地回答到：“没有!”准备活动做好后，第一排开跑，我在第二排，负责人给前排同学数圈数，老师说往返总共跑8圈4分钟过关，可第一排跑下来连第一也才4分07秒，我心里更没底了。
“第二排，预备，跑”随着老师的一声令下，我撒腿就跑，可也只在队伍中倒数第二，后面的同学一句：“我怎么比你还慢。”就加足马力，把我甩后头了。我气愤不已，一连穿过了好几个同学，到了第三的位置，听着后面同学叭嗒叭塔地追赶声，心里洋洋自得。可是才跑第3圈，就累得不行了，第4圈的时候，第二的同学早看不见影了，我不知不觉落到倒数第三，我几乎是走回了第4圈的终点，在同学们此起彼伏为我加油的声音中又跑了起来，尽管精疲力竭，想想这么多同学在鼓励我，无形中又增加了一份能量，我跑得很疯狂，心中暖暖的。
接下来的第5、6圈不知怎么熬过来的，可能由于前面落后太多，我始终未能超越前面同学，当我半跑半走地跑到第7圈终点时，袁老师已经在给跑完的同学排位了。“你第七”我刚准备停下，老师抓住了我：“不是你，你还有一圈。”我前无古人，后无来者地独自奔走，终于，坚持下来了。“你第十一，很好，坚持了下来，不错了!”老师把记分的任务交给体委，扶着我绕着操场走了好久，等我平复了呼吸，老师笑着鼓励我：“下次会更好的!”心中温温的、热热的，比脸还烫，比手还热。
四级作文得分点及分值【六】
Dear Mary,
You said in your letter that many of your classmates wore fashionableclothes, but you couldn\'t afford them so you felt very depressed. There are dif-ferent views on people\'s clothes. The followings are my ideas:
Firstly, you shouldn\'t put too much emphasis on physical appearance.
Remember that the most important task for you today is to concentrate on yourstudies. No matter what you wear, you will really look your best when youcome out first in your examinations.
Secondly, you should understand that it is a fine virtue to live in fru-gality. Just as a famous saying goes, Frugality is the mother of virtue.
Since your family can\'t provide you with enough money to buy fashionableclothes, it is all the more necessary for you to try to lighten the financialburden of your family. And you will find the virtue of frugality benefit youa lot in your future life.
I hope you understand what I mean. Hope you will take a positive attitudetowards life and will be happy again when you read my letter.
Yours,
Anne
四级作文得分点及分值【七】
This cartoon is silly, and yet compelling: a large customer holds a hopelessly small piece of cloth as the tailor carefully measures. Such an image suggests that one needs to consider practical reality in the pursuance of goals. Merely acting on one's desires, while ignoring the facts at hand, cannot lead to success.
The fact that currently there are more graduates than jobs reminds us of the importance of rational thinking. Every year approximately 3 million students graduate from universities and begin looking for work. Many of them fail to find suitable employment because there are simply not enough opportunities to accommodate such great numbers of graduates. In addition, however, one might also cite flawed individual assessment as a reason.
In order to create a realistic target for one's future, one must make rational decisions and prepare accordingly. A student who aims to be a surgeon, for example, must take care to acquire opportunities to do clinical practice and gain sufficient knowledge. In other words, customers would do well to take accurate measurements before purchasing their fabric. A small piece of cloth cannot adequately clothe a large person.
四级作文得分点及分值【八】
只有灵活、恰当地掌握创新构思的方法，才能写出有新意的考场佳作来。一般说来，的创新构思，可有下列切入角 度。
一、从话题的另一意义的角度切入
许多中考话题都具有多义性，若只盯住其本义或其常用义，则构思很难出新，写出的作文虽不跑题但也显得一般化，若撇开其本义或常见义，转而从其引申义或 其比喻义的角度切入，构思定能出新。如黑龙江省2001年的中考话题是"水"，若从自然界之"水"这个意思层面上去理解，把"水"当成名词，则构思很难出 新;若把"水"理解成形容词，如"这个人很水"，在这个层面上理解"水"的意思，则其拟题、行文都会很有新意。
二、从缩小话题内涵的角度切入
有许多中考话题的意思非常宽泛，若给话题加上一些限制语或修饰语，便缩小了话题的内涵，有利于考场作文出新出奇。如海南省中考话题是"第一次"，便应 缩小其内涵，才有利于构思选材，考场作文才能出新出奇。这里要强调的是：添加的限制语或修饰语，必须避开众生皆谈、人云亦云的误区，要从自己的.材料库中那 许多不为人知的人、事、景、物着手。这样，新颖、独特的作文内容就会流于笔底，并能紧紧地抓住阅卷老师的眼和心。
三、从话题的逆向思维角度切入
围绕话题，自我多方设问，多方求答，用以开启思维，立意选材，这是众多考生的一般作法。然而，绝大多数考生只知沿着话题正向发问，而很少有逆向发 问的。如江西省2001年中考话题"尊重"，考生可以提出"何为尊重"、"谁尊重谁"、"为什么要尊重"、"谁可做尊重或被他人尊重的典范"等等问题，这 些都是从正面发问，没能跳出常规思维的圈子;若舍弃"正向"，从"逆向"角度思考发问，"为什么谁不尊重谁"、"不尊重他人好不好，为什么"、"不尊重的 事例或现象有哪些"、"怎样消除不尊重现象"等等，如此这般的提问思考，文章的构思、选材就避开了老调，步入了新境。
四、从话题的另一时空的角度切入
围绕考试话题，写自己经历的事，写自己身边的事，从家庭时空、从社会时空、从学校时空范围去立意选材，这本无不可。但这都是从话题的"现实时空"去构 思的。若能启动联想、想象或幻想，从话题的"过去时空"或"未来时空"角度去构思，只要联想、想象或幻想的人、事、景、物合乎情理，不管写的是话题的"过 去时空"或"未来时空"，只要能含蓄、曲折地反映话题的"现实时空"，便能写出颇具新意的考场作文来。如四川省德阳市2001年的中考话题"初三生活"， 若一般人可能都会写自己或同龄人的初三生活，若启动联想、想象或幻想，写爷爷、奶奶的初三生活或几十年以后自己子孙的初三生活，只要合乎情理，则定能让阅 卷老师耳目一新，从而拍案叫绝。
