中考英语作文范文改错【一】
1。 头绪分明，脉络清楚
写好记叙文，首先要头绪分明，脉络清楚，明确文章要求写什么。要对所写的事件或人物进行分析，弄清事件发生、发展一直到结束的整个过程，然后再收集选取素材。这些素材都应该跟上述五个“ W ”和一个“ H ”有关。尽管不是每篇记叙文里都必须包括这些“ W ”和“ H ”，但动笔之前，围绕五个“ W ”和“ H ”进行构思是必不可少的。
2。 突出中心，详略得当
在文章的框架确定后，对支持故事的素材的选取是很关键的。选材要注意取舍，应该从表现文章主题的需要出发，分清主次，定好详略。要突出重点，详写细述那些能表现文章主题的重要情节，略写粗述那么非关键的次要情节。面面俱到反而使情节罗列化，使人不得要领。这一点是写好记叙文要解决的一个基本问题，也需要一定的技巧。如：
One night a man came to our house and told me， "There is a family with eight children。 They have not eaten for days。" I took some food with me and went。
When I finally came to that family， I saw the faces of those little children disfigured （破坏外貌） by hunger。 There was no sorrow or sadness in their faces， just the deep pain of hunger。
I gave the rice to the mother。 She divided the rice in two， and went out， carrying half the rice。 When she came back， I asked her， "Where did you go?" she gave me this simple answer， "To my neighbors — they are hungry also!"
3。 用活语言，准确生动
记叙文要用具体的事件和生动的语言对人、事、物加以叙述。一篇好的记叙文的语言既要准确、生动，又要表现力强，这样才能把人、事描写得具体生动，其可读性才强。试比较下面一篇例文修改的前后效果。
原文：
One day Xiaoqiang was wandering away。 He was soon lost among people and traffic。 He could not find the way back home and started crying。 Just then， two young students who were passing by found him standing alone in front of a shop and crying。 They went up to Xiaoqiang and asked him what had happened。 Xiaoqiang told them how he got lost and where he lived。 The two students decided to take him home。 Mother was pleased to see Xiaoqiang come back safe and sound。 She invited the two students into the house and gave them some money， but they didn＇t take it。 She served them with tea but they left。
修改后：
The other day， five-year-old Xiaoqiang left home alone and wandered happily in the street。 After some time， he felt hungry so he wanted to go back home。 But he found he was lost among the crowded people and heavy traffic。 When he could not find the way home， he started and crying。 Just then， two young students who were passing by from school found him sanding crying in front of a shop。 They immediately went up to him。
"Little boy， why are you standing here crying?" they asked。
"I want Mom， I go home。" said the boy， still crying。
"Don＇t worry， we＇ll send you home。"
And they spent the next two hours looking for the boy＇s house。 With the help of a policeman， they finally found it。
When the worried mother saw her son come back safe and sound， she was so thankful and she invited the students into her house。 Gratefully， she offered them some money， saying it was a way to express her thanks， but the young students firmly refused it and left without even a cup of tea。
中考英语作文范文改错【二】
导入：
第1段：提出一种现象或某种困难作为议论的话题
正文：
第2段：Many ways can help to solve this serious problem, but the following may be most effective. First of all... Another way to solve the problem is ... Finally...(列出2~3个解决此类问题的办法
结论：
第3段：These are not the best but the only two/ three measures we can take. But it should be noted that we should take action to...(强调解决此类问题的根本方法
中考英语作文范文改错【三】
一天，老虎大王让小动物去开会，可是一连十天都没有一个小动物来，老虎大王发怒了，它说：“我一定要找它们算算账。”
于是它出门，它看见了小马，背着很多东西走过来，忙问：“小马，你怎么不去开会?”小马立刻跑过来说：“虎大王，您没有说什么时候去，而且你可知道我很忙的'，白天背，晚上抬。”虎大王听了点了点头，说：“好吧，这次放过你。”
虎王见到了小猴在树上玩，火冒三丈说：“小猴，你为什么不去参加我的大会?胆子真大，看我不吃了你!”小猴吓了一跳，说：“虎大王，别吃，别吃，我也很冤枉啊我，真想去的，可是我和松鼠正在玩捉迷藏，我正想下去开会，小松鼠一下子出来说‘捉到了’，就把我给推了下去，我骨折了，今天才好了一点，我现在腿还有点痛呢。”说着走给虎大王看，虎大王见了说：“好吧，这次放了你，下一个，我绝不轻饶。”
虎大王来到了小猪的房子，看见门关着，就上前咚咚咚咚的推门。过了好一会儿，小猪才把眼睛揉揉，开了门，虎大王说：“你干嘛不去开会?”小猪说：“对不起，您没说让谁去，我还以为我又脏又胖，还有一股臭味，您不会让我去的，如果要去，我还是把我洗得香喷喷的再去。”老虎大王说：“好吧，我放了你。”
老虎大王又来到小兔家，看见小兔提着萝卜，老虎大王说：“你为什么不去开会?”小兔吓了一跳，把篮子往边上一放，蹦蹦跳跳地来了：“我不知道去什么地方开会，我还跑了一大圈，竟然没一个人开会，所以还以为我听错了呢，你让我怎么去呢?还有我也不知道什么时候去呀，我连续五天跑来跑去，就是没见到你和别的小动物，我也是冤枉的呀。”老虎说：“好吧，看来是我出错了，我一定要重写一个开会通知。”一到家，它就写起来了：
请所有动物明天上午7点到我家来开会，共同商讨如何阻止人类破坏森林的大事。
那天所有的小动物都来开会了，老虎非常满意!
