修改语文作文范文【一】
One of the most crucial reasons for my view is that we could (canhave more opportunities to realize our dreams in the process of moving between places. As a young man(young men, we are all eager for success. However the road to (approach towardsuccess is so hard that we have to make great efforts. We must possess many aspects, including(去掉 outstanding intelligence, excellent education, rich experience and certainly good luck, most of which are acquired only by insistently pursuing, besides (andstudiously striving in different cities(if necessary. I can take one of my friends for instance. In order (toreceive the best education, after graduating from the senior school, he left his hometown to a remote city, BEIJING. But four years later, to looking for a better job, he left BEIJING and come to SHENZHEN, a beautiful city in his dream. Now his new goal is to enter American B-School to acquire (ofmore advanced knowledge in financing. We can see, in just about ten years, he has moves three times, and what is more(more importantly, this moving sill continue. Actually, in contemporary society more and more people are as this(act like him .
Another essential fact why (reason whyI hold my view is that we can enjoy a more rich and colorful (richer and more colorfullife, as we change places we live in. For my part, enjoying life is as important as, if not more important than, devoting work(hard working. It is a pleasing thing in the holiday to visit beautiful sceneries in different places. My friends mentioned in the last paragraph(before, has visited the snow scene in the north, and the widely (widesea in the south.
Admittedly, we cannot neglect the virtues (ofspending the entire life in one place. People can attained (attainthe feeling of family to their community, and the relationships between people are closer. Nevertheless moving between cities perhaps is more attractive to young persons than staying in one place thorough their lives.
From all the reasons mentioned above, it is not difficult to get the conclusion that if it is possible, I would move a number of times throughout my lives to look for the best job, house or climate I am eager for.
修改语文作文范文【二】
这幅画可谓是精美绝伦！画中以一条贴近山坡的小溪流为主。看上去，溪水湍急，卷起层层小浪花，浪花拍打在水中的岩石上，似乎发出了“啪——啪——”有规律的声响。在清澈的水中，有鱼儿在游，有的还蹦跳出来，在空中划过一条条优美的弧线。河岸上的芦苇呈摇摆状态，怎么看怎么像是在舞蹈呢！该不会是在跳《江南stle》吧？
修改语文作文范文【三】
板书：
关于板书，把学生的精彩写上去足矣，即是学生的光荣，也是你以生为本的表现。你的，只写一个标题就行。
修改语文作文范文【四】
要准确规范，忌前后不一
有一指令性通知的初稿，提出了三点要求：
1.明晰责任、齐抓共管。2.分流管理、分级负责;3.查改并举，重在治理。
这段中，第一点、第二点的前半句用的都是顿号，而第三点前半句用的却是逗号，前后不一致。还有，第一点的结尾用的是句号，而第二点的结尾用的却是分号，也是前后不一致。这些都应该统一起来，才显得对称。公文的标点符号使用不能马虎，要注意顿号、逗号、分号、句号等点号表示的是不同层次的停顿，使用得当，句子就能形成起伏均匀的节奏感。后来，这段修改为：
1.明晰责任，齐抓共管。2.分流管理，分级负责。3.查改并举，重在治理。
这样，通过标点的规范使用，可以表明\"三点要求\"相互之间的平等、平行关系。
修改语文作文范文【五】
画作中的景物富有动感，正说明画的.创作者技艺精湛。但是，一幅画作中的景物再怎么有动感，也是“定格”了的，不可能变换姿态，不可能做连续动作。那么，我们用文字来描述画作中的富有动感的景物，就要注意：既要表现其十足的动感，又要把握好尺度，不能在本来真实的东西里掺杂进虚假的成分。
比如，在画作中，可以看到浪花拍打在岩石上，但是，不可能看到一个浪花拍打过后，消退了，后面的浪花又拍打到岩石上；可以看到“有鱼儿蹦跳出来”，但是，不可能看到一会儿蹦跳起一条鱼，过一会儿又蹦跳起一条鱼……切记：看画作，看照片，不同于观看视频啊！
在上面的“病文”中，小作者就没把握好表现画作中动感的尺度，以至于让画作中的景物变换了姿态，或者做出了连续动作。尤其让芦苇“又扭脖子又动屁股”，既描写得过火，又显得不够文雅。
一般来说，油画也好，水粉画也好，都是没有声音的，所谓的“啪——啪——”的声音，是我们想象出来的，做文字描述时应该用“似乎”“仿佛”等字眼儿来标示。
修改语文作文范文【六】
活动一 赏读积累，丰富语言
1.自主阅读摘录本上的好词好句。
2.同桌之间或小组之间互相赏读，资源共享。
3.教师补充一些描写比赛场面的成语和语句。
成语：
生龙活虎人流如潮振奋人心异常激烈你追我赶争先恐后 龙腾虎跃力争上游不甘落后 奋勇向前你争我夺英姿飒爽
语句：
A双方队员握紧绳子，他们一个个脚蹬着地，身体向后倾，拼命向自己的方向拽绳子。绳中间的红绸带一会儿移向猛虎队，一会儿又移向雄鹰队，互不相让。
B此时，我方的队员们一个个都红了眼，有的人脸憋得通红，有的人龇着牙、咧着嘴在叫劲，还有的人双手紧握绳子铆足了劲向自己方向拉。
C球飞快地向我飞来，我赶紧把力气集中在手腕上，看好球飞来的方向。用力一抽，球又被我反抽了回去。
D他紧绷着脸，双目圆瞪，手掌拉疼了也顾不得，还是一股作气地往后拉，脚跟往后退，一步、两步、三步……
E同学们高兴得又蹦又跳，互相拥抱，欢呼声、喝彩声，祝贺声使整个校园沸腾起来，连树上的小鸟也纷纷飞来凑热闹，好象在说：“这场比赛真精彩！”
活动二 回忆比赛，感受场景
1.回忆精彩的拔河比赛或者篮球等体育比赛。
2.小组交流，用心感受。（要重点感受比赛场上的气氛，注意选择一到两个典型人物进行重点描写，并注意写清啦啦队的表现，特别要注意人物的语言、动作、神态，同时要注意自己的心理感受）
