现象评论类作文（现象类作文万能模板）

更新时间：2024-05-28 21:33:57

现象评论类作文【一】

“各位先生、女士，大家好！我是主持人文章阿姨！首先，让我们来认识一下标点宝宝吧……”文章阿姨话音未落，后台便传来一阵争吵声。字宝宝过去一看，原来是标点宝宝因为谁的用处最大而争吵起来。文章阿姨沉思了片刻后，决定把聚会改成“标点符号评论会”，并请字典爷爷和三个字宝宝做评委。

首先登场的是骄傲的逗号哥哥，他说：“我是无人不知的`逗号，要是没有我，句子和句子之间的停顿也就没有了。”字典爷爷点了点头说：“下一位！”接着上场的是不爱说话的句号妹妹。她递上一张纸，上面写着：“您好，我是句号，我负责每句话的结束，要是没有了我，文章永远不会结束。”字典爷爷说：“下一位！”话音刚落，高傲自大的感叹号弟弟就上场了，他说道：“你好！我是大名鼎鼎的感叹号，我能帮作者表达一种感情。在标点符号中，我是最有用的！”

突然，一大堆标点符号宝宝冲了进来，大吵大闹。原来，感叹号弟弟的那句话被他们听到了，他们很愤怒，想冲进来评个理。字典爷爷好不容易把宝宝们安顿下来，语重心长地说：“宝宝们，你们各有各的用处，为什么要比呢？”听了字典爷爷的话，标点符号宝宝们都脸红了！文章爷爷见事情已解决，就继续开聚会了。

现象评论类作文【二】

面对生活，有人积极热情，有人消极冷淡;面对失败，有人一笑视之，有人愁容满面;面对人生，有人信心百倍，有人垂头丧气。人与人之间原本只有微小的差别，但不同的心态却造成了巨大的差异。可见，不同的心态可以“摇控”出不同的产物，让我们写下不同的人生。

霍金是我们众所周知的科学家，他唯一的能动的是他的那几根手指。有的人问他是否被一生控制在轮椅上而感到悲哀，而霍金的回答却让每个人都为之震惊。他说虽然上帝只给了我几根能动的手指，但我还有能够想像世界探索未知的头脑，所以我并不感到悲哀。是的，每个人都不可能是完美的，面对这样或那样的不足，我们用怎样的心态面对是很重要的。人人向往成功，但总有些人会失败，一个好的心态才能摇控出成功的人生。

好的心态，让我们发掘潜能，坏的心态，让我们失去自信。

面对困难，有的人因为从内心害怕它的强大，这样的心态让我们输掉了自信心。可以想象，失去了自信的人，当他在面对一切事物的时候还会取得成功吗?曾经赢得马拉松的冠军，当记者问他为什么会跑第一，他的回答令人惊讶。他说因为他身后有只狼。其实他身后并没有狼，只是他在心中时刻想象着有一只狼在追他，他用这样的心态让自己的神经时刻处在最高兴奋的状态，结果把自己的潜能都发挥了出来，取得了胜利。所以拥有一个好的心态才能赢得自己意想来到的成功。

心态像镜子，它可以让你美好的心灵展现得更加精彩，又可以让你丑陋的灵魂无处躲藏;心态像雨伞，它可以阻拦暴风骤雨对你的袭击，又可以防碍阳光把你变得温暖;心态像利剑，它可以让你砍断前方的荆棘，又可以反刺你的心灵。

把握好心态，他人的评论，用良好积极的`心态“摇控”出多姿多彩的未来，笑迎一切，笑对人生。

现象评论类作文【三】

【习作题目】

Students Grading of Their Teachers

1．学生给老师打分已很普遍；

2．人们对其持不同态度（肯定或否定的态度）；

3．你的看法。

【习作解读】

显然，此任务是写一篇议论文，主题为对学生给老师打分的现象进行议论，开放性较大。学生应根据实际情况，从多个方面阐述其原因并表达自己对这种现象的观点和态度。该话题更加贴近学生的实际生活，但有一定的语言难度，也有一定的思想深度。通过此文的写作，也从侧面提示了学生在注重写作基础训练的前提下，也应该注重培养积极思考、灵活运用、自由发挥等能力。

此次的写作任务出题相当巧妙，写作内容涉及的词汇和句型都属于新课程标准范围。题目在考查学生写作能力的同时，也在考查学生的分析判断能力及高度概括能力。富有想象力的学生写出的文章可能生动而富有灵性。此题目能引发学生对平日习以为常的行为进行反思，学会换位思考，这对中学生的性格和品德培养非常重要。

【习作展示】

Students Grading of Their Teachers

Nowadays, a lot of schools ask their students to contribute to grading their teachers. As a teacher, it is their responsibility to satisfy their students in all aspects. Meanwhile, it is admirable that school teachers prefer to expose themselves to their students.

If the system of grading of teachers by students is introduced, it will benefit students, teachers and the administration of the school for a number of reasons. For one thing, the system will give teachers and the administration of the school an insight into the minds of the students and show whether the teachers are successful in getting their lessons understood by the students; for another, it will also encourage the good teachers to continue their efforts and motivate themselves. What is more, it will expose those who are not doing enough and will lead them to correct their teaching methods as well as their attitude towards students. Thus the quality of teaching will certainly improve.

In a word, it is a promising concept and will bring surprisingly good results if applied with the right conditions.

【习作点评】

作者观点明确，赞成学生给老师打分。作为老师，就要做一个让学生满意的老师。这样，不仅对学生、学校有利，而且对老师本人也有利。这样，老师就会从另一个角度重新审视自己，看自己是否是一个成功的老师。如果得到学生的认可，这将是对自己的一次鼓励，为继续前行增添动力。如果学生的认可度不高，老师就应进行反思，调控教学方法和教学态度。这样，教学质量肯定会提高。作

者用简洁、明快的语言以及自己的经历列举了充分的论据，内容充实，贴近生活。For one thing, for another, what is more, in a word等过渡词的使用，是短文结构清晰，层次分明。最后，最值得一提的是，文中多次正确运用的高级词汇和复杂句式，给文章增添了不少文采。综上所述，这是一篇不可多得的佳作，值得向大家推荐。

二、写作模板

此模板适用于社会现象类议论文。参考模式如下：

Nowadays, there exists an increasingly serious social/economic/environmental There are a couple of reasons behind this problem/phenomenon. For one ；Based on the above discussions, I can easily forecast that more and more people

Nowadays, there exists a common phenomenon—with the development of the Internet, more and more people tend to send electronic cards instead of paper ones to their friends and relatives when an important holiday comes.

There are a couple of reasons behind this phenomenon. For one thing, compared with the traditional cards, electronic cards are more lively and interesting. They can give not only pictures but also sound and animation. For another, there are many websites online which offer varieties of cards for you to choose from. What is more, with the popularity of the electronic cards, less paper is used in making paper cards, which does good to our environment.

Based on the above discussions, I can easily forecast that sending greetings by using electronic cards will be accepted by more and more people, not only the young ones.

三、写作指导

写作思路是先列出一个具体的社会问题或者现象，然后分析产生的原因和产生的影响，最后提出解决问题的办法，或者得出结论，或者提出个人看法，或者预测前景。

论点、论据、论证是议论文的三要素。论点是作者对所议论问题所持有的见解和主张，论据是用来证明论点的事实和道理的根据；论证是用论据来证明论点的方法和过程。一般来说，议论文每段都有主题句来确定论点。论证的方法很多，但最常用的是因果分析法。即：分析事实与论点的因果关系，指出取得结果的原因是所要证明的论点，从而达到论证的目的。

在近几年的高考中，议论文的比重占得越来越多，议论文的.出题形式可以多种多样，有看图写作、图表、表格、书信等各种类型，但文体实际是议论文，而有时是夹叙的议论文。议论文的写作要点是：

1. 观点鲜明，文章一定有一个明确的中心论点。

2. 层次分明，一个中心论点通常有几个分论点支持，不同层次之间要分明，过渡清晰自然。

3. 最后一段一般要总结全文，得出一个符合逻辑的结论，突出中心思想。

4. 一般采用一般现在时。

5. 语言简洁有力，一般不采用口语。

四、巩固练习

1.【练习题目】

2010年上海世界博览会期间，上万的青年志愿者参加志愿工作，请你谈谈对此现象的看法。

【参考范文】

During the period of holding the 2010 World Expo in Shanghai, tens of thousands of young citizens are participating in volunteer work, hoping to devote themselves to the grand occasion. As far as I am concerned, everyone ought to enter for it. Here are the reasons I want to mention.

It can be argued that the advantages of doing unpaid volunteer work are enormous, because volunteer work is actually a two-way street. First of all, volunteer work should always benefit people who need help. Those who need help will feel happier due to our immediate help. On the other hand, as far as the young people ourselves are concerned, we have more opportunities to develop the sense of responsibility, independence as well as interpersonal skills in the process of helping others.

Through this kind of work, we become confident and mature. In addition, we can make many friends and increase our chances of getting the jobs of our dreams. Furthermore, volunteer work plays an active role in building up a harmonious society.

In a word, it is of great value for the young adults to offer volunteer work. The youth volunteers do make a difference by the voluntary work! Why not join them and do something for our country?

2.【练习题目】

某些中学生为了显示自己成熟或表明自己醋而吸烟。请写一篇120词左右的短文，列举吸烟的危害，并提出建议。

【参考范文】

I am sorry to know that more and more middle school students begin to smoke. I think it is wrong to believe that smoking is cool and even think that smoking makes you appear to be mature. In fact, smoking is not cool but very dangerous.

First, smoking can do much damage to health. Scientific researches show that smoking can lead to heart diseases, cancers and other problems. It is reported that about 5 million people die of diseases related to smoking each year all over the world.

Second, it is a waste of money to smoke cigarettes. Smoking can cost a great deal of money. Once you are addicted to it, it is difficult to give it up.

What’s more, smoking can cause fires easily, which may do great damage to your life and your surroundings.

So give up smoking at once! Only in this way can you keep healthy forever.

3. 【练习题目】近年来，越来越多的中学生出国学习，出现了所谓的中学生“出国热”。请根据以下提供的信息，谈谈自己的看法。

1）良好的语言环境，更利于语言学习。

2）拓宽视野，学习国外先进的科学技术。

3）传播各民族间的不同文化。

参考词汇：媒介，中间人：mediator

【参考范文】

In recent years, studying abroad has been popular. Tens of thousands of Chinese middle school students have gone to foreign countries to study．Many people are trying their best to apply to go abroad.

There are a number of reasons for attending schools abroad．First, students who are studying abroad can act as mediators between people of different cultures. They can communicate with each other directly and learn about different cultures. Second, they can learn much more advanced knowledge of science and technology from foreign countries and experience different education methods．Third, they live in foreign countries and take classes given by foreign teachers. As a result, they can learn foreign languages much more quickly.

Therefore, it is advisable to attend schools abroad.

4.【练习题目】随着经济和社会的发展，道路上的私人小汽车越来越多。请根据自己的观察和理解，谈谈自己的观点。

【参考范文】

With the fantastic development both in economy and in society in China, the number of people who own private cars is on the rise. Some people have bought cars of their own, and others are planning to buy cars. But I strongly object to the increase in developing private cars.

I hold that automobiles will give rise to a series of problems. In the first place, as more and more cars are produced and run on the road, a large volume of poisonous gas will be given off, polluting the atmosphere and causing actual harm to the health of people. Next, private cars contribute to traffic jams so greatly that the advantages gained in comfort and freedom are often cancelled out by the frustration caused by traffic jams. The last problem is the increasing number of car accidents that have killed and will kill a lot of people in a friction of a second.

In a word, although automobiles have been playing a vital part in the daily activities of our society, they also bring us numerous troubles such as more serious environmental pollution, more traffic accidents and more energy consumption. They drink up huge amounts of fuel and throw out huge amounts of pollutants. Jams waste our precious time. Therefore, I am against developing private cars.

现象评论类作文【四】

今天，老师让我们同学互相之间写优缺点。我觉得你给别人写就得多看别人的优点，别人给你写的就得看自己的缺点，并且要改正缺点，这样才能团结一心，友谊长存。

第二节一下课，我就要给苏方写了，这是我写得第一张。我就坐在那里发愁，写她什么优点呢?一直到上课，才想出来她有什么优点。不是她没有优点，而是太多了，我不知道该写什么了。我正准备写她的优点时，老师已经进来了，我一想：这不行，被老师发现可不好，算了，我还是下课在写吧!但是下课在写也不是个好事，因为我整节课都在想：我写完了以后她会不会接受，会不会大发雷霆?因为除了写优点，还要写缺点呢!叮当叮当……

漫长的一节课终于结束了。我拿出笔和纸写：“苏方，你好!你是一个学习好，性格开朗的小女孩，不过你很爱打人，希望你以后改正，汪海蓉，20XX年4月11日”。这时我又想她会不会接受呢?会不会大发雷霆呢?我小心翼翼的把纸卷成一个卷，走过去跟苏方说：“这是我给你的纸条，你收好呀!”“行!”她爽快地回答。我走回座位，看她正在看那个纸条，我心“砰砰砰”地跳，只见她微微一笑，拿起笔在纸上写字。我提到嗓子眼的心终于像石头一样落了地。不一会儿，她也把一个纸条给我，一声不吭地走了，我又开始提心吊胆，她会不会生气了呢?我赶紧把纸条打开，上面写着：“谢谢你帮我指出缺点。苏方20XX年4月11日”，我又放心下来了。这时上课铃打响了，我就认认真真的上课了。

从此，我和苏方的关系更加亲密了。