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初中作文600字带赏析和点评(初中优秀作文范文赏析600字)

初中作文600字带赏析和点评(初中优秀作文范文赏析600字)

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初中作文600字带赏析和点评(初中优秀作文范文赏析600字)

初中作文600字带赏析和点评【一】

A no African black boy, this year 12, small eyes, collapse collapse on the nose. And there was a big ears Desmond tutu gene "siddhi moving ears!

"The teacher is saying!" See, I and sister trueer, for example, 3/4 * 7/10. I said must take three quarters into the denominator is ten, elder sister said, also can directly take, I didn't pay attention in class, to lead to such result, I this is impatient.

"Clicking" I played the boy's favorite through the wire. The mother shouted: "have a pear for me!" When I was have a good time, very reluctantly said: "go play again for a while." After a while mother urged again, I still say to play for a while. When I play enough, it's been more than an hour, after the mother took a pear, mother long give a sigh said: "eat pears, you wash is really not easy!" This is I love playing computer.

"Get up!" Sister woke me, I rubbed his dim eyes, deep ground to say: "what time is it?" "11" "only 11 o 'clock will go to sleep!" "Today, cleaning,! Hurry up!" Three words heard the cleaning, I immediately pack to sleep, you know, I usually take a little clothes, socks, are ok, but... Cleaning or forget it! Sister cry to me a few words: "slacker!" This is not love doing housework, I love to sleep.

"Second, second pass" the person who is fierce Shouting it is me. I love playing basketball and table tennis, although I'm not too good, but I can play, a free until to don't want to play! And table tennis, we are all activity to practice and play, although I played not champions, but "no challenge champion will never be the champion" is the movement of love me!!!!!!!

"Oh! I have forgot my meal card in our bedroom!" Poor Zhang Shanzheng pain shouted. "I borrow your" I said without hesitation! Zhang Shanzheng hurriedly said thank you to me, my arms around him. "All are brothers, don't mention it!" Another time before six and I (3 class Zhao Junkai and fit in with the cui, we are all iron elder brothers, once was playing it, Zhao Junkai injured, we two word, holding him and ran the clinic, to check he don't have my card. I didn't take, I will let him to register my name, since the return of money!

This is me, more I trouble, less advantage of me. Don't you want to make friends with me?

一个没有非洲人黑的小男孩,今年12,小眼睛,塌塌的鼻子。又有大耳朵图图的基因“动耳神功!”

“老师就是这样讲的啊!”看,我又和姐姐较真,就比如说3/4*7/10吧!我说必须把3/4化成分母是十,姐姐说,也可以直接乘,都是我在课上没注意听,才导致成这样的结果,这就是不耐烦的我。

“嗒嗒”我又玩起了男生的最爱《穿越火线》。妈妈喊到:“给我洗个梨!”我正玩得高兴的时候,就很不情愿地说:“再玩一会再去。”过了一会妈妈又催了,我还是说再玩一会。等到我玩够了,已经过了一个多小时了,之后才给妈妈洗了个梨,妈妈长叹一口气说:“吃你洗的梨,可真是不太容易啊!”这就是爱玩电脑的我。

“起床了!”姐姐叫醒了我,我揉了揉朦胧的眼睛,低沉地说:“几点了?”“11点了”“才11点再睡会!”“今天大扫除,!赶紧起来!”一听到大扫除三个字,我立即就装睡,要知道,平常我洗个小衣服、小袜子,还行,可是……大扫除还是算了吧!姐姐对我嚎了几句:“懒虫!”这就是不爱干家务,爱睡觉的我。

“秒传,秒传”那个正激烈喊着的人正是我。我非常爱打篮球和乒乓球,虽然打得不是太好,但是一有空我就玩,直到玩到不想玩为止!还有乒乓球,我们都是活动课练和玩,虽然我打得不是冠军,但是,“不与冠军较量就永远不会是冠军”这就是爱运动的我!

“哎呀!我的饭卡忘在寝室了!”可怜的张山正痛苦得呐喊道。“我借你”我毫不犹豫的说!张山郑连忙对我说了声谢谢,我搂住他。“都是兄弟,不用客气!”还有一次我和以前六(3班的赵俊凯还有崔合群,我们都是铁哥们,有一次正在玩耍时,赵俊凯受伤了,我们俩二话不说,挽着他就往医务室跑,要结账了他没带卡。我也没带,我就让他登记我的名字,下回来还钱!

这就是我,毛病多的我,优点少的我。你们难道不愿意跟我交朋友吗?

初中作文600字带赏析和点评【二】

水平如镜的西湖,红叶似火的香山,峰峦雄伟的泰山我都一一游览过。

“叽叽叽”是什么吵醒了我的美梦,原来是树林里的小鸟开始了它们交响曲。我也迈着轻盈的步伐踏上了去树林的小路。早上,已经起雾了,那白茫茫的晨雾犹如仙女掉下的纱巾布满了整条小路,也像一条白色丝带在缓缓移动。走进树林,第一眼就看见了那一排排像哨兵一样的松树,它们挺立着,不管严寒和酷暑,都像士兵守着这片树林。树上的小鸟唱得更欢了,婉转动听的歌曲在我耳边萦绕,使我不得不放慢了脚步。

原来是一条小溪流啊。它看上去是多么得安静啊!它平静地流着,并不发出声响,从山头到山脚,远远地看去,它就像是一条柔柔的丝绸,轻轻地晃动。再加上边上鲜花的.镶嵌,小溪就变得更美了,更柔了。小溪也时常会调皮,它有时会撞在石头上,溅起一朵朵小水花,打得边上的鲜花“啪啪”作响。

我家院子里有一棵老桂花树。一到春天,桂花树就长出了新芽,那一个个芽胞如同害羞的小孩不敢露脸。夏天不知不觉地来到时,桂花树就长满了“绿头发”,又如一把巨伞撑在院子里。秋姑娘迈着优美的舞步走来时,桂花树就开满了桂花。它们散发着淡淡的清香,优雅而纯洁。桂花们有的三五朵一群,有的聚在一起,还有的只是个花骨朵儿,即将要含苞欲放。  我的家乡不但景美,人情也很美。这里的人们互相帮助,热情待客,如果遇上了熟人,无论多么赶时间都得谈上两句。只要邻居家有困难,自己无论如何都要伸出援手。有外客来访,鸡鸭肉是必不可少的。

我的家乡“美”景,是不是很美?

初中作文600字带赏析和点评【三】

一条虽短却乌黑浓密的马尾辫,一对闪闪发亮的、并不算大却很传神的棕色眼睛,一个并不经常出现的鲜红的两道杠,她是我的同桌兼最好的朋友,S。我觉得她是个比较奇特的人,但她也是个优等生。

上课的时候,老师看向我们时她确实像个好学生,认真地做笔记和思考,可等老师一转过脸去板书或讲解,她立马换上了另一种表现:往往是挑只铅笔把目光放到抽屉里去。在干什么呢?我们知道,是在画画呢!画各种各样的女孩儿,衣服换了一套又一套,套套都那么精细好看。有时画得过于认真了,被老师罚站起来,并总挨这样一句骂“你喜欢画画,学美术去,别上课啦!”可等她一坐下,立刻旧病复发,又开始画起女孩儿来。有时还不忘塞给我一张小纸条,上写“我才不想上课呢,巴不得去学美术!”如果你以为她下次测试一定会考得不好,那就大错特错了,她考试从未低于95分哦!

下课铃一响,S一定会第一个大喊出声:“终于可以

初中作文600字带赏析和点评【四】

这时,太阳已西斜了,它收敛起刺眼的光芒,只在它的周围留下了一圈柔和的光晕,像个害羞的姑娘露着红红的脸蛋:那万里无云的晴空本来是淡蓝色的,像明净的湖水,现在也慢慢加重了颜色。越来越浓,越来越蓝,简直像画家在用蓝色的画笔层层加深。它身边的天空却呈现出黄里透紫的悦目色彩。

我情不自禁地赞叹道:“落日前的景象太美了,太美了!”

过了一会儿,突然太阳涨红了圆溜溜的脸颊,像个大红球。向天空、向峰峦、向大地喷出了红艳艳的光芒。它身边的晚霞不断地扩大着范围,不断更换锦衣,红的、粉红的、紫的五光十色,美丽极了。

这时,太阳的脸变得更红了,显露出了自己美丽的容貌,带着满腔的喜悦轻轻地走向西山背后,只把那红光留在遥远的峰顶和天际。最后,它愉快地一跳,消失在山后了。