中考优秀作文10篇带有点评【一】
中考优秀作文10篇带有点评【二】
在我的脑海里，有许许多多的事，就像大海里的小鱼、沙滩上的贝壳、天上的繁星那么多。但有一件事最令我难忘，是什么事呢？就让我敞开记忆的大门，一起去看一看吧！
那是在一年前的某一天，我独自走在大街上。突然，一辆电动车疾驰而过，接着一位老奶奶就倒在了地上，那辆电动车没有停下，反而加速逃走了。老奶奶躺在地上痛苦地呻吟着，围观的人越来越多，但却没有一个人去扶她，当然，也包括我在内。过了一会儿，一位陌生男子过来了，要去扶老奶奶，却被一个人用手拦住了。那个人小声对他说：“我劝你别去扶她，小心被赖上。”那位男子没有理他，毅然去扶老奶奶，他把老奶奶送到了医院。
事后，我很自责我为什么没有去扶老奶奶，我下定决心以后也要乐于助人。
我们的这个社会不正需要乐于助人的人么？
中考优秀作文10篇带有点评【三】
Why Are Trees Important?
Trees are very important to us. Do you know why? Let me tell you.
Trees take in carbon dioxide from the air and make oxygen. That's important. People and animals need oxygen to live. Many small animals and insects live in the trees. Some of them also get food from trees. Trees can also stop water and soil from going away. If we have a lot of trees, we stop deserts from being large. I think this is very important. You know, trees are green. They can make our country even more beautiful.
Trees are our good friends. We should plant more trees and take good care of them.
点评：文章先阐明论点，接着论证，最后重申自己的观点。
范文2
It's Our Duty To Protect Our Environment
It's our duty to protect our environment. Where we live? The earth. The earth is the only one place we live in. So you know how important the environment is. But now, some people are harming the environment, like cutting down trees, drawing pictures on public walls, littering onto the ground. It's terrible if we still do it. Now, it's time for all the people in the society to protect the environment. It's our duty. It needs each of us to make a contribution to improving the environment. We should make our environment more and more beautiful.
点评：作者多用学过的'词语不但保证了正确，还巩固了所学的知识，并且注意句型的多样化，如长句，短句，疑问句，使用了“if，so, now, but”等词，整篇文章读起来朗朗上口。实际上，写文章就像串珠子，连接词就在于把一个个单词串起来。
