2020全国1卷优秀作文及点评【一】
2020全国1卷优秀作文及点评【二】
她静静地坐在残破的房间里，四周是布满弹孔的墙壁。几天天前，一群荷枪实弹的以色列士兵闯入她的家中搜查武装分子，当他们的目光扫过患有腰伤的哥哥身上的绷带时，枪声顿起。泊里，哥哥扭曲的身躯永远地印入她的脑海，滚滚的泪珠滑过她洁白的纱布。那天，一个十六岁的阿拉伯少女郑重地作出了她的选择：“我再也不要当什么老师、护士了，我要成为一名哈马斯战士，消灭犹太人，为我的国家而战！”
2020全国1卷优秀作文及点评【三】
Why Are Trees Important?
Trees are very important to us. Do you know why? Let me tell you.
Trees take in carbon dioxide from the air and make oxygen. That's important. People and animals need oxygen to live. Many small animals and insects live in the trees. Some of them also get food from trees. Trees can also stop water and soil from going away. If we have a lot of trees, we stop deserts from being large. I think this is very important. You know, trees are green. They can make our country even more beautiful.
Trees are our good friends. We should plant more trees and take good care of them.
点评：文章先阐明论点，接着论证，最后重申自己的观点。
范文2
It's Our Duty To Protect Our Environment
It's our duty to protect our environment. Where we live? The earth. The earth is the only one place we live in. So you know how important the environment is. But now, some people are harming the environment, like cutting down trees, drawing pictures on public walls, littering onto the ground. It's terrible if we still do it. Now, it's time for all the people in the society to protect the environment. It's our duty. It needs each of us to make a contribution to improving the environment. We should make our environment more and more beautiful.
点评：作者多用学过的'词语不但保证了正确，还巩固了所学的知识，并且注意句型的多样化，如长句，短句，疑问句，使用了“if，so, now, but”等词，整篇文章读起来朗朗上口。实际上，写文章就像串珠子，连接词就在于把一个个单词串起来。
2020全国1卷优秀作文及点评【四】
Computer is important.
We must learn English well.
It's very important for us to...
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2020全国1卷优秀作文及点评【五】
So we must...
So it's very important for us to...
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2020全国1卷优秀作文及点评【六】
表达不准确，详略不当
屠夫非常困窘急迫，恐怕前后一起受到狼的攻击。屠夫看见田野里有一个打麦场，打麦场的主人把柴草堆积在打麦场里，覆盖成小山（似的）。心里暗自高兴：“天助我也。哦哈哈”于是屠夫跑过去靠在柴草堆的下面，放下担子拿起屠刀。两只狼不敢上前，瞪着眼睛朝着屠夫：“小样吧，想把我给了，你还嫩点，也不看看我在这山上混了多少年了。凭你这智商，想打败我，除非太阳从西边出来。”
一会儿，一只狼径直走开了，另一只狼像狗似的蹲坐在屠夫的前面。时间长了，那只狼的眼睛好像闭上了，神情悠闲得很。屠夫突然跳起：“这明明是摆着让我砍你嘛，真是个低智商的狼。”于是用刀砍狼的脑袋，又连砍几刀把狼。屠夫刚想要走，转身看见柴草堆的后面，另一只狼正在柴草堆里打洞，打算要钻洞进去，来攻击屠夫的后面。身子已经钻进去了一半，只露出屁股和尾巴。屠夫从狼的后面砍断了狼的大腿，也把狼了。屠夫这才明白前面的那只狼假装睡觉，原来是用这种方式来诱惑敌方。屠夫不禁心里赞叹：“这狼，真是狠。”
狼也太狡猾了，可是一会儿两只狼都被了，禽兽的欺骗手段能有多少呢？只给人们增加笑料罢了。
2020全国1卷优秀作文及点评【七】
本文语言虽然并不华丽,但却极为准确生动,情感丰富而真实,读来津津有味。尤其小作者观察外公包饺子的步骤，观察得是细致入微，可见小作者是个细心的人。虽为一件小事,但作者却描述得有声有色,结尾处不可或缺的点晴之笔,较好地凸现了文章主题。2020全国1卷优秀作文及点评【八】
本文行文个流畅，语句通顺，段落分明，条理清晰。然而文章的中心不是“包饺子”吗，可全文内容有关于“包饺子”的描述却只有寥寥几笔哦，有点重点不突出。建议小作者在文中添加具体“包饺子”的桥段，可以是自己如何包，或者是跟着妈妈学包饺子，将这一过程仔细、细致地描写出来。
